I just read all 15 chapters in one sitting. my eyes hurt and my butt is sore but I just. couldn't. stop. are you sure you didn't have an outline when you started this? because this looks extremely well-plotted.
I love how you switch the POVs so that we can see how different characters react to the various situations. and you have a real knack for suspense. a few scenes literally had me holding my breath, they were so intense. one tiny problem I had was the constant use of 'I am' instead of 'I'm' and 'I will' instead of 'I'll'. it makes the characters sound a bit... foreign, I guess. just small stuff that I could sort of overlook.
anyway, yes, I love this and I'm really, really glad you decided to write it.
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Date: 2007-02-26 04:42 pm (UTC)I love how you switch the POVs so that we can see how different characters react to the various situations. and you have a real knack for suspense. a few scenes literally had me holding my breath, they were so intense. one tiny problem I had was the constant use of 'I am' instead of 'I'm' and 'I will' instead of 'I'll'. it makes the characters sound a bit... foreign, I guess. just small stuff that I could sort of overlook.
anyway, yes, I love this and I'm really, really glad you decided to write it.